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Re: Lovers of A Murder

Post by shawty_12 on 6/14/2009, 8:32 pm

holy fizzle! that was SCARY! i think i jumped
when yoona screamed>.< i was so caught up in the
chapter that omg, i felt like i was going to die or
something. hm, i wonder who that boy/guy is.
i thought he was dead or something....but i guess not.
man, whoever set up that trap must REALLY know
her 'cause he seems to know almost all the moves
that she will/was making. but interesting chapter.
thanks for the pm. i'll be waiting~
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Post by WhyItsME on 6/14/2009, 9:52 pm

HOLY WOW;
That was scary !
You should become a author or something !
I just started reading this fic and I'm curious
On what's going to happen !!
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Chapter 14

Post by JYCYB on 6/15/2009, 12:57 pm

Stuck


“Yoobin~ Yoobin~ Wakey wakey!” A voice next to me sang.
My head was throbbing as I turned to face what looked like a wall.
“Ugh, where am I?” I tried to reach for my head, but something was blocking my way.
“Welcome to your death Yoobin,” I looked around for a person but he was nowhere to be found.
“In about 30 minutes, you will we gasping for air if your friend Youngbae doesn’t come in time haha.” He laughed. Where was I?
“If you use your head and feel around the sides of you, you may find a candle and lighter! Then you’ll see where you are. Go on and look!” He exclaimed.

I really couldn’t see anything. It was pitch black. With the limit of space I had, my hands crawled around looking for a tube like shape. The other hand went the other way. My right hand felt the wall and found the candle. My left hand felt something bony.
It was dry and soft, but I paid no attention to that. I roamed around some more looking for a lighter.

I found one and lit it.

My head was turned to the left side as the lighter cast a luminescent light at the bony object.
What I saw was Ahjumma's bony fingers curled up. I was trapped in her coffin.
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I'm stuck in class.
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Post by WhyItsME on 6/15/2009, 3:54 pm

OMG OMG OMG OMG
Your teacher must have something wrong with
her if she thinks your writing skills aren't good (:
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Post by shawty_12 on 6/15/2009, 7:25 pm

oh man, it just keeps on getting scarier and scarier.
stuck in a coffin is bad enough. stuck in a coffin
with a dead body is worse. talk about 30
min. i think i'd died first. being claustrophobic
doesn't help matters much in my case.
but thanks for the pm. it's a great chapter again!
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Post by WhyItsME on 6/15/2009, 9:33 pm

Btw , ahjussi in Korean is an old man >.<
Ajuma is an old women >.<
But I guess it doesn't really matter since
Nobody noticed (:
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Post by JYCYB on 6/15/2009, 9:38 pm

WhyItsME wrote:Btw , ahjussi in Korean is an old man >.<
Ajuma is an old women >.<
But I guess it doesn't really matter since
Nobody noticed (:

I noticed that too! Haha D; Like I meant 'Ahjumma' and like after awhile when I read this, I saw that it was a huge mistake O.O I'll change it! hahaha
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Post by JYCYB on 6/15/2009, 9:45 pm

WhyItsME wrote:OMG OMG OMG OMG
Your teacher must have something wrong with
her if she thinks your writing skills aren't good (:

lolololololol I think she's crazy xD haha

Thanks for reading/
Your comments seriously makes me want to 'rofl' haha
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Re: Lovers of A Murder

Post by JYCYB on 6/15/2009, 9:46 pm

shawty_12 wrote:oh man, it just keeps on getting scarier and scarier.
stuck in a coffin is bad enough. stuck in a coffin
with a dead body is worse. talk about 30
min. i think i'd died first. being claustrophobic
doesn't help matters much in my case.
but thanks for the pm. it's a great chapter again!

Ohboy ohboy!

I'm sorry for creeping you out! hahaha
asdfghjkl;
it's unintentional? Wink
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Post by WhyItsME on 6/16/2009, 4:39 pm

Next time I have a book report I'm so gonna
pay you to do it for me XDDD

Hm.. How about we start at 10 dollars an hour (:
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Post by JYCYB on 6/16/2009, 5:30 pm

WhyItsME wrote:Next time I have a book report I'm so gonna
pay you to do it for me XDDD

Hm.. How about we start at 10 dollars an hour (:

LMAOO!
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Chapter 15

Post by JYCYB on 6/17/2009, 8:50 pm

Secrets 00


I closed my eyes, horrified with the body that was in front of me. I wanted to get out of that coffin. I wished that I too was dead. It would've made it easier to be in this situation. Where was Youngbae? Why.. Why is this person playing games with me... My mind went blank as it got harder for me to breath.

“Yoobin! Yoobin!” I felt someone nudge my shoulders.

“Is she alright? It's been an hour..” I heard him ask.

“She's still breathing. She should be fine.” The second voice replied. It was Youngbae. I slowly opened my eyes and stared at Seungri's blood shot eyes looking back at me, worrying.

“What the hell happened?” I rubbed my head. I felt a huge bump from when I hit the bathtub.

“You fainted after seeing the Ahjumma's body,” Youngbae explained. I suddenly remembered everything.

“No I didn't. You took me home and someone was waiting at home, where he captured me and Yoo- WHERE'S YOONA?!” I jumped up suddenly remembering her.

“What are you talking about? We were at this beach the whole time!” Seungri shook my shoulders.

“Is her head blown out from when she hit the coffin? Do we need to take her to the hospital?” Seungri looked at me with worried eyes.

“I'm fine! It all happened!” I began explaining what I had experienced. Finishing, they looked at each other with weird expressions.

“Yoobin... none of that happened at all. When you saw the body, you completely fainted and hit your head against the coffin. You've been unconscious for an hour.” Youngbae gently explained.

“No..no it all happened! I'm telling you! Here! Let's go back home and see if Yoona is there! We have to check the bathroom for the “BABO” sign too! Come on!” I grabbed both of their hands and led them to the car.

Youngbae looked at me worriedly and sighed. He then started the car. When he backed up, I saw a distant figure looking out at us. I blinked and he was gone.

“Did you see that?” I asked Seungri.

“See what?”

“Never mind.” I slunk back into my seat and stared out into the distant.
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I ran up the gravel steps that led the way to the master's home. Not expecting anyone there, I opened the door with the spare key hidden underneath the clay frog.

“AISH! YOOBIN-AH! WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN!? WE'VE BEEN NEEDING YOU!” the First master called out from the top of the stairs.

“YOOBIN! DID YOU PICK UP MY DRY-CLEANING!?” Yoona appeared. What was going on? Wasn't everything I experienced real? Yoona's home.. The masters too.. I closed my eyes and thought things over. I reopened them and the room began spinning. It spun faster and faster. I fell and everything went black.

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HI... new reader here :D

Post by DanceMistress on 6/17/2009, 8:54 pm

You have a nice story...
I really love reading this kind of genre, the mysterious type 8)
I'll support this fic and recommend this to my friends who are FanFics writer, too
Good luck to other chapters *thumbs up*
Update some more :D
By the way, I'm new here and I posted a story here entitled LOVE or REVENGE
Hope you'll read and looking forward to your comment :D 8) :D
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Re: Lovers of A Murder

Post by JYCYB on 6/17/2009, 9:45 pm

DanceMistress wrote:You have a nice story...
I really love reading this kind of genre, the mysterious type Cool
I'll support this fic and recommend this to my friends who are FanFics writer, too
Good luck to other chapters *thumbs up*
Update some more Very Happy
By the way, I'm new here and I posted a story here entitled LOVE or REVENGE
Hope you'll read and looking forward to your comment Very Happy Cool Very Happy

;o Yay awesome^^ haha Thanks for supporting! I'll be sure to read yours too xD
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Re: Lovers of A Murder

Post by shawty_12 on 6/18/2009, 10:03 am

woah! that was weird. like, super duper weird.
and scary-again. i hate it when that happens.
like, waking up and getting all confuse with
your senses all mixed up and all. hm, wonder
what really happened. youngbae and
seungri were both persistent that nothing
happened but then her "dream" i guess(?)
was so real too. this is great! Very Happy lolx...
(i'm weird. saying it's scary one min. and
good the next^^) thanks for the pm!
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Chapter 16

Post by JYCYB on 6/20/2009, 1:17 am

Secrets 01


“What are we going to do about her?” I heard Seungri mumble
.
“We can play more games with her...” This voice was new.

“No more games. I'm tired of this. Yoobin's a nice girl.” Youngbae sighed.

“You're falling for her aren't you?” Another voice. “What have I taught you these years? No messing around with girls until the job is done.”

“There's really no point in this 'game'! Yoobin didn't do shit to us. Why are we punishing her?” He shouted.

“Mm..Youngbae..” I grumbled as I tried to pry my eyes open.

“Shh.. Yoobin, you're going into a deep sleep now. Sweet Dreams.” The voice tapped something on his finger and I felt a thin needle touch the outside of my skin.

“Mm..” I whimpered, trying to get away from him.

“Shh. Don't worry, it won't hurt.a.bit.” He pierced the needle into a vein and I felt it traveling its way up my arm, stinging everything in its path.

“R-RAHHH!” I screamed, tossing and turning in the bed. The medication felt as if I was in a fire and the flames were burning every inch of my body as it traveled around. It would've been painless if he just shot me right there. My legs kicked around the sheets trying to escape the pain.

“WHAT THE HELL DID YOU DO?! YOU'RE HURTING HER!” I heard Youngbae yell. I felt him rush to my side, trying to calm me.

“Don't worry! It's just a side effect! She should be unconscious in about...5..4...3..2..” My vision faded and it became pitch black.
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“Yoobin.. are you alright?” His fingers softly touched my hand as I gained consciousness.

“Youngbae...what's going on?” I asked him in a daze.

“There are some secrets.. but I'm not allowed to tell you right here. They're watching us...” He whispered as he pointed up at a camera in the corner.

“Then tell me this... Why can't I move around?” I tried to squiggle around my bed, but I wasn't able to budge.

“They thought you were going to do something rash.” He got up from his chair and began untying me.

“Where am I?” The walls were unfamiliar. White bland walls in each corner.

“This is one of the rooms in my house.” He helped me sit upright as I observed my surroundings some more.

“Can I leave?” He looked at me uncannily. Then he sighed.

“Yoobin, it's not safe out there if you go alone.” I brought out my hand.

“I want you to go with me.” He stared at my hand and then looked up at me.

“I'm not someone you want to be with at the moment...”

“I trust you Youngbae. From what I heard, you were trying to hep me. You've been there for me since the day we met. Well sort of.” I beamed.

“But I've led you to such dangerous areas...” He looked out the window away from my gaze.

“You didn't. You just listened to where I needed to go and you just took me there. Stop feeling guilty.” I patted his back.

“You sure?”

“Yes. Now, is there a next clue to this so called 'game'?”

“They don't trust me anymore. I'm sorry. They didn't tell me what they had in store next. And I can't tell you who they are because there is a real mastermind behind it all. And I'm still not sure who that is. So I guess we're going to have to wait.” Just then, my phone vibrated on the table.
I looked at Youngbae and he handed me the phone.

“H-hello?” I answered.

“Ah Yoobin, I see that you know of Youngbae's minor deeds. Haha. Are you ready for the next part?” He chuckled.

“If it'll stop you from torturing me, then yes I'm ready.”

“Ohoho, Yoobin! Of course it won't stop me from torturing you! The game is endless!” He smirked. “Look under your bed. That's the next clue.” 'Click' The phone went silent. I got out hastily from my position on the bed and looked underneath it. There, I found a box wrapped in wrapping paper. I grabbed the box lightly and placed it on the bed. There was a note on top and it read, “Surprise!” I opened the wrapping neatly and revealed a shoe box. Looking at Youngbae, I slowly opened it.

Surrounded with hay, in the center of the box laid a dead rat. On the bridge of its nose laid a note.

“10 minutes to shut down the bomb.”
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Post by shawty_12 on 6/20/2009, 1:35 pm

ACK!!!!!!!! it's a dead rat! omg, YUCK!!>.<
(i was sitting in a rolling chair while reading this
and instinctively, my toes curled from the ground
and i had to jump onto the seat, all legs and stuff.)
scary, nasty, blach! but i still like it-_____- lolx...
thanks for the pm and the great chapter^^
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Post by WhyItsME on 6/25/2009, 2:53 pm

Pfft. Not that Epik
Pfft Pfft.

It was Epik to the HIGH
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Post by Guest on 7/2/2009, 4:49 pm

O___O I can picture it in my mind !
Though the rat part was kinda ewie >.<
Yoobin&Youngbae FTW ! >w<

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Post by WhyItsME on 7/7/2009, 10:09 pm

UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE
DON'T KEEP US WAITING !!!!!!!!!!
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NEW READER!

Post by ivyK on 7/11/2009, 10:57 pm

HEY!
I'm a new reader here and I am hooked to yr story!
*THUMBS UP!* Very Happy
Please please PM me if u have a updated new chapter!
Thanks! =]
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where?!

Post by JYCYB on 7/23/2009, 1:51 am

Hello:)
>.<
Sorry haven't been posting. I may not be able to post for a longgg time

The reason: in Myanmar and Taiwan.
all my chapters are writtne on mylaptoop and i can't get internet access on it D; But i WILL be writing them and saving it on my laptop!
Most likely I'll be able to update at least one chapter by the time i gget to taiwan!

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Post by shawty_12 on 7/24/2009, 4:53 pm

it's okay^^ we'll wait. thanks for letting us know-i thought you abandon the story>.<
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Post by WhyItsME on 8/12/2009, 9:52 pm

Update soon !!!
HURRY !! OR IMMA EAT YOU UPPP
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Chapter 17

Post by JYCYB on 8/21/2009, 11:33 pm

Stop


You've got to be kidding me. This..This mastermind is still planning to kill me and time was ticking.

6 minutes.

“I don't know how to stop a bomb!” I shouted, almost panicking.

5 minutes.

“Chill, let's just get out of here.” He placed his palm on the doorknob, it didn't budge.
He tried twisting it again, still it didn't twist.
We were locked in here.

4 minutes.

“They locked us in here?!” I ran to the door slamming my hand against it.

3 minutes

“The window.” Youngbae grabbed the vase that was placed on a table and threw it against the window.

-CRASH-

2 minutes

The glass shattered to pieces and we looked out the window to find us on the third story.

Underneath us was a hedge, just big enough for the both of us.

1 minute.

“Do you trust me?” Youngbae asked as he stood on the windowsill. I nodded.

“Good.” He gripped my arm and in a blink of an eye, we were falling out the window just as the room was about to explode.
0..0..0

As we landed in the hedge, I felt something slash my arm.

“Ow...” I got up and stared at my arm as warm red blood began gushing out of the cut. Something weird had occurred when I looked up away from the injured arm. The room hadn't exploded. There was no sign of smoke exiting out from the window. We were tricked.

“Fuck, he tricked me.”

“Here, let's go to your house and bandage up that wound.”
I followed him to his car and we drove off with my bloody arm.
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The house, empty again. It still give me a weird feeling in the pit of my stomach. I was too used to having Uhmma or Appa being in the house always whenever I returned from somewhere.
The door was unlock as we approached the porch.

“What the hell?” Vases were broken, portraits were ruined. The whole place looked as if a hurricane had just hit it.

“Worry about it after. Come on, let me bandage your arm.” We walked upstairs and into my room. Youngbae found a first aid kit in the bathroom and began to clean my wound.

“Ouch! Watch it!” I jerked my arm away.

“Sorry,” he gently took back my arm and wrapped gauze around it.

“I..can't believe they're still continuing this game,” he sighed.

“Aish, what did I ever do to them? As far as I know, I've never even met this guy before.”

“They're only doing this because they want revenge.”

“From my father? But didn't they get that already, by killing him and the rest of my family?”

“They want more.” He replied. “They want you to suffer as well.”

“What kind of reason is that?” I jumped up as the phone in my pockets vibrated.
It was him.

“AYE. I'm done playing games with you. Just quit it. I'll go back to living with dread and you can go back doing whatever you do. I'm DONE.”

“Oh Yoobin,” he chuckled. “If you were done, why didn't you say so?”

“I did.”

“ Let's meet face to face. And I'll tell you everything you want to know. All you have to do is... come alone. No bringing your lover boy here, or you'll surely pay for it.”

“Alright. Where?”

“Go to the place where your parents died.”

“It's getting dark out, how will I know where you are?”

“Look. For. Lights.”

That was it.
I now had a choice to make.
Keep playing games or end it.
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